Friday, August 12, 2011

What feedback could you give me on this poem?

uming it's free verse, it's a good poem. But you're lacking proper punctuation to signify how the poem should be read. The 2nd and 3rd stanzas are technically one ongoing sentence. So it's hard to get the rhythm down without noting where you want people to pause or stop or refrain.

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